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Ivanu, Haysaki
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Name:
Ivanu, Haysaki
Ocupation:
Wanderer
Specialty:
CQC (Close Quarter Combat)
Age:
16
Gender:
Male
Race:
Human
Eyes:
Olive Green
Hair:
Brown; But he normally wears a hat (Brown, blue or white)
Personality:
Maximillian is normally calm and doesn’t talk alot he’s normally resting on tree’s or in abandoned houses. He like to keep everything clean and neat and is hard worker type of person, also he's always in time for everything (normally 25 min before) and can be very trusty.
He’s not a very social person so talking to other people may be a bit uncomfortable some times. His serious looking personality and antisocial make him a strange person to hear a joke from and normally his jokes are bad, or sometimes says thinks that should not bee said. He’s kind of intelligent but from time to time he forgot important things like the names of persons he meet. He’s kind of greedy and sometimes he can give more importance to an object than a person.
Birth Place:
Small Isle near Nettai Isle in south blue
History:
The Ivanu family are known to be a clan of merchant who sell’s his hand-made products also some of them are helplessly covetous treasure Hunters.They are interested in any kind of goods or items. But also they are greedy and take alot of appreciation to the material stuffs. There are 3 kind of Ivanu families: The merchant who normally live in village frontiers, the forger’s who live inside villages and the mercenary who are spread all over the world. All of Ivanu family can be seen spreaded all over the world except in cold climates they don’t like ice why well that’s a family secret.......
The merchants normally buy and sell goods, they buy one product in one town frontier and then sell them in another town Isle were that product is very appreciated and then the chain begin again buying and selling from frontier to frontier is their life; they are not very skilled fighter but because they travel alot they have a great speed and can carry alot of stuffs also because they travel alot they have alot of knowledge about the other countries....and their products of course.
The forgers normally live inside cities and towns selling they weapons to anybody who can pay them they don’t move alot and normally stay in one place; they have some fighting experiences because once they made a weapon they use ‘em to check the quality, also they can resist hot climates and has a high stamina to work alot.
The mercenaries are all over the world except in cold climates, they are good warriors who uses they intelligence and unique fighting style to hunt treasures or even some bounty they normally take any kind of job in order to get some money; They fight using CQC and swords they are the most greedy of the 3 but also the fewest, they reflexes and memory make them never loose a bounty.
As a child Haysaki he always lived in the frontiers because of his family; From this he learned alot of stuffs from the Isles and the sea, although he doesn’t like forging or selling/buying stuff's he has to learn those kind of stuffs.
He decided to become a Wanderer because of his grand father (and because he was bored) he was a great adventurer well known in some isles of south blue; His grandpa is the only family member to be recogniced as a legend and now Haysaki decided to continue that legacy.
When he went to his grandfather he teaches him the family battle style (CQC) and some weapon training; also because his grand father was very strict he almost had no time to play or socialize with other kid’s. He worked all his life on becoming an adventurer that his social life was very small. They both lived in a medium sized house in the village of the Current which is a place with a template climate.
Although the original idea was to train until he can keep up with grandfather the village was sudenly atacked by pirates and was almost totally destroyed if it wasn't because of grand father he manage to drive away the most of the pirates but at the cost of his life doing so he told maximilliano to hurry up and run away because the pirates will probably come back to this isle, although he didn't wanted to he did as grandpa said and run to the harbor where he get on the first ship he found ignoring were he will land or how far it is, and without knowing he started his own adventure.
Now he must take all the knowledge and expericence he gained to start his own adventure and to punish those people that likes to take advantage of the weak people.
Likes:
-Sweet bread
-Coffe with alot of sugar
-Sea food
-Chewing gum (citric fruit especially)
-Cleaningless
-Wearing hats
Dislikes:
-Onion
-Bullies
-Thight clothes
-People who live a happy and easy lives who doesn't know what work means
-Smoking people
-Combing his hair
Hobbies:
-Fishing
-Sleeping
-Training
-Working
Positive traits:
-A hard-working guy
-He can be a verry realiable person
-He's a good listener
Negative traits:
-A verry serious and cold looking guy
-His jokes suck's
-He sometimes says thing that doesn't suposed to be said
Character Flaws:
-He can be verry boring; even if you talk to him he finish the conversation with a straigh answer even though he does it unconsciously.
Physical Description:
Haysaki height is 6'0" and is muscular thin body he has a slightly tan complexion and most of his other characteristics are pretty generic as well. It has a messy style he always covers his hair with hats. (or look at the image below in the signature)
Excelled Skill/Devil Fruit:
Normally consist on close quarters combat (CQC) which is a type of fighting in which someone engage the enemy with personal weapons at very short range, even to the point of hand-to-hand combat. The operators need great proficiency with their weapons, but also the ability to make split-second decisions in order to avoid or limit friendly casualties. CQC is defined as a short duration, high intensity conflict, characterized by sudden violence at close range.
Weapons:
A Short sword (12" blade, 18" overall - 5.8 lb)
Gloves with steel shots on knuckles and fingers and a steel plate in his arm hiden in his sleeves making it like a hidden shield.
Dream:
He wants to write his name in the golden page's of history and become a legendary adventurer like his grandfather or even better
Reason for Dream:
He wants to be remembered like his grandfather
Techniques:
1)CQC technique weak spot atack - A fairly stong punch that is intended to hit one to seven vital body parts (neck, throat, heart, solar plexus, liver, kidneys, linfatics)
2)CQC technique Yamatsuki - A simultaneous jab one straight to the head while the other to the abdomen the oponent covers the punch that's going to his head as a diversion while the one going to the abdomen connects
3) CQC technique bloody road - Maximillian throws his knife at the oponent leg making him bleed and cry out of pain while doing this maximillian get close to the oponent and star hitting on him.
*Note this techniques can be used one after another like a combo for exe: 3, 2, 1, 1 this means Bloody road then yamatsuki and finishing him with two weak spot atacks.
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Re: Maximilliano J. Fox
« Reply #1 on: Nov 6th, 2009, 08:35am » |
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First off, you really should be more careful with your spelling, there are errors all over the place.
The profile overall if fine but there are a few things to work on, first off to need to change your forum display name to match your character's name. It can be his whole name or just his first name, up to you.
Next in the profile Max's name needs to be written japanese style, last name first and first name last; i.e. J. Fox Maximilliano or maybe Fox Maximilliano J. Doesn't look as cool I know but rules are rules.
Also speaking of rules his hole Island needs to be one that actually exists in our South Blue, fix those up and I think you're all set.
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Re: Maximilliano J. Fox
« Reply #2 on: Nov 6th, 2009, 7:18pm » |
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Ok about the spelling it is because ima mexican and i suck big time at english grammar so that explains it.
So knowing that my grammar sucks i bshould better quit right now because no matter if i do a [20/10] if th espelling and grammar is no good the rewards will be lame or not as great as is has to be.
About the forum name i can change it.
The character name has to be japanese style heh...ok i think i'll change it.
And the isle well i think i can change it too
ABout the whole grammar and spelling thing i can only thing in 3 solutions......the first one is to keep playing like this and decrease the rewards and eventually have a hard time in the future; the next one is knowing that ima from a foreing country u can give a kind of handicap in grammar-spelling; the other thing is quitting right now and maybe someone else can take my entire character i'll give them permission and if they want to change something they're free to doit.....OK anyways i hope a get a satisfactory solution or if u think on some other soluthion ima open to those......
Anyways thx for ur time and have a good time there 
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Re: Ivanu, Haysaki
« Reply #3 on: Nov 6th, 2009, 10:11pm » |
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Oh man please don't take what Wallop said the wrong way. He just meant there was room for improvement Your grammar might not be the best now, but as you keep writing you'll definately improve. Don't think just by having bad grammar we won't give you good rewards, you won't have to work harder than anyone else either.
Just write what you like and enjoy your stay here, if you need advice or help the staff is here to answer any questions you might have! Just do things your way since we're all on this site to have fun, you're not here to be looked down upon. So I hope you don't quit because of this misunderstanding.
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Re: Ivanu, Haysaki
« Reply #4 on: Nov 6th, 2009, 11:07pm » |
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OK then ima all set can u aprove my char now
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Re: Ivanu, Haysaki
« Reply #5 on: Nov 8th, 2009, 6:38pm » |
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Looks good to me, approved.
Sorry about the misunderstanding earlier, like Tendou said I didn't mean to offend or disrespect you in any way. We don't think any less of our members nor do we subtract from rewards because of poor grammar, but I wouldn't be doing my job right if I didn't point things like that out. Sometimes people rush though their profile and make mistakes by accident but I'll still mention it so they know to take their time next time. But no matter the reason it's still no big deal.
I also agree with Tendou that once you get RPing you'll be surprised at how much your grammar and writing style will improve, so get out there and have some fun!
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